Summary draft 1 regarding Smart Parking System
In
the article “ IoT based Smart Parking Systems for Smart Cities,” hiOTron.com
(n.d) claims that the adoption of the automated smart parking management system
is crucial in the modern environment. They supported it with recent research
that, “30% of the traffic in urban areas is generated by drivers and motorists
looking for parking spaces”. Smart Parking system uses sensors instruments to
identify the occupancy of the parking lots and is designed to transmit scanned
data to the database in real-time. Consequently, drivers will be able to
determine if there is an available parking slot through the app. It can be
adopted in most urban parking spaces and managed by a programmable logic
controller (PLC). However, hiOtron.com state that there will be many challenges such
as high upfront costs, enforcement and inconvenience for tourists. To summarise, the
benefits such as improved traffic and reduced management cost are worth the
challenge.
Reference:
hIOTron.com (2020). IoT based Smart Parking Systems for Smart Cities.
Retrieved from
https://www.hiotron.com/smart-parking/
Cher Jin Yong,
ReplyDeleteSome points for you to take note:
1. Your punctuation marks should be with the quotation marks, i.e. to say "..Smart Cities”, parking spaces”.
2. Your tenses are not consistent, "Smart Parking system uses" VS "designed to transmit"
3. I like your choice of words such as "consequently."
4. In your second-last sentence, consider re-introducing the source/author "However, they state.." vs "However, hiOTron.com also states"
À Bientôt,
Angelo
5. Use a better ending transition word. I.e. to say "To summarise," "In conclusion," instead of jusr "still"
DeleteDear Angelo,
DeleteThank you for spotting my mistakes. I will change them in my revised version.
Cheers,
JY